>>>MY COMMENTS:

The book that I always recommend is called "Comedy Writing
Secrets" by Helitzer. It's such a great book, and it has
a bunch of great exercises inside to help you increase
your humor skills. As you're working on it, just think
COCKY and Funny.

I personally developed a lot of my Cocky and Funny skills
by chatting online over instant messenger services with
women. When you use one of these IM programs, it gives you
a chance to think of great things to say, because the
conversation is about 1/5th the speed of normal
conversation. It's great practice, and you can write down
different lines to try, then get online and use them...
with real women, even!

Great job, and keep it up.